Silver_Falcon
MemberCompsognathusDec-18-2014 9:44 AMI know I said it'd be out tomorrow, but I had enough free time to get this out early ^U^! Complementary waffles will be provided at the end of the show. Enjoy!
Part 1
Into the Fire
3/6/09, 1500 hours, Quandahar Province, Afghanistan
Gunfire broke the silence shocking Krieger awake. A man was yelling but he couldn’t hear what he said. Someone grabbed him and hoisted him off of the ground. He looked up, his head swirling and blinked away the stars in his eyes. It was his friend, Sam, or as everyone else called him Patches.
Patches slapped him once, the impact barely noticeable on his numb, mud caked face. He sensed a faint ringing in his ears before his senses came back. “MORTARTS! THEY HAVE MORTARS!” echoed out the voice of his CO, barely audible through the gunfire. The flashes from a machine gun made him want to close his still stiff eyelids, and a feeling of nausea passed through him as a mortar shell landed several yards away. Patches grabbed Krieger’s hand and dragged him through the rubble. The stars had come back, and he could feel warm, wet blood coming from a cut on his forehead.
“Hey buddy, you’re gonna be alright. A shell landed near you, the shockwave knocked you out, nearly killed you,” said Patches. “We need to get you a medic though, and quickly. Hey medic! Medic!” he called.
More gunshots rang out as the fighting continued. Krieger became aware of a sharp, aching pain is his left leg, and looked down. It had been sprayed with shrapnel, which had torn through his uniform and shredded his flesh. He nearly threw up at the sight of his own emaciated body. A soldier slid next to them, and by the small red cross on his helmet, it was apparent that he was a medic.
“Is he alright?” Asked Patches as the medic attached a tourniquet to Krieger’s hip.
“Well, the bits are pretty deep in there, I can’t say for sure but I can at least try to help.” He pulled out a syringe and jabbed it into Krieger’s leg. “There, that should help with the pain. Hey, look at me, buddy.”
Krieger did as he was told, and Patches lifted off his helmet. The medic pulled out a small flashlight and shined it into his eyes. “Hell, he’s going into shock, we need to get him out of here. Hey, Sam, get a Humvee up here, now,” commanded the medic, reading the nametape on Patches’ ballistic vest.
Patches waved in the air and yelled, beckoning for one of their convoy’s Humvees to come over. The medic and Patches hoisted Krieger up as an Apache flew overhead. They had nearly made it to the Humvee, the driver beckoning and calling out to them, when the helicopter began firing, destroying the OpFor’s gunnery positions. The gunfire died down shortly afterwards leaving the area eerily quiet.
Patches shouted “Corporal Sam Freeman, US Army, 75th Ranger corps,” introducing himself to the driver. The driver responded in turn, “PFC Adam Pakowski, US Army, 75th Ranger Corps.” Patches climbed into the passenger seat and the medic lifted Krieger into the back, sitting next to him. “Where to?”
“Firebase Echo fast, he’s rapidly losing blood, come on, let’s go!” commanded the medic As he tightened the tourniquet.
“Copy, okay boys, buckle up!” shouted the driver as he floored the gas, the Humvee bouncing down the road.
Krieger began to slip into unconsciousness again, losing his connection to the world. Patches looked back and grabbed his unconscious friends hand. “Come on guy, just a little further.” But Krieger had already died.
So, that was part 1. Part 2 will likely be released early next week. As I promised, here are the waffles:
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Here, have a waffle (-'.')-#
Tyrant king
MemberCompsognathusDec-18-2014 10:53 AMYou lied, you said tomorow.
but I will take the waffle.
Silver_Falcon
MemberCompsognathusDec-18-2014 11:29 AMI got it done early (read: yesterday). Pls no hurt.
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JPCerato
MemberCompsognathusDec-18-2014 10:13 PMNice! Read earlier this morning, didn't comment because my Ipod is too stupid to...and Im on holidays with my family, afternoon now, got some free time from my brothers (:D).
Excellently written! Love it! Liked how it doesn't just start with dinosaurs, but rather a background story, nice!
And read your comment....I sorta guessed, like a said, feels like predator, so if you have seen that and its sequeles/AVP you know not to get too attatched...just got to ask will it be violent/horror? Sorta what I am thinking...Overall first chapter was great 8.5 (I am going to rate each chapter (if thats ok) :D
Something Real
MemberTyrannosaurus RexDec-18-2014 10:21 PMSILVER_FALCON - That was extremely fun to read! I very much enjoyed the intense nature of your story - quite visceral! Thank you so very much for taking the time to share this with us! :)
Silver_Falcon
MemberCompsognathusDec-19-2014 4:08 PMThanks for the comliments ^U^
Yes, action (violence)/ horror is probably a good classification for what I'm aiming for with this series. I'm also trying to add in a bit of Jurassic Park's signature Chaos Effect, what can go wrong will, as this is essentially Jurassic world fan-fiction.
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JPCerato
MemberCompsognathusDec-19-2014 5:13 PMGot it! ;) Can't wait! Love the Chaos Effect type feel, can't wait!
BTW If I do mine, like you said, I will make it that feel, horror, Predator, etc. Don't worry, i'll mention you ;)
I came up with a name last night...when I saw this pic of JPOG...of what looks to be a Acro sleeping with...a Rex? I can't really tell...last night looked like a Rex now...not sure....
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I thought of a mated pair giving birth to a hybrid...Acrorannosaurus Rex!
I also want to make a hybrid Ceratosaurus...Raptor...and Spino....love your ideas!
Silver_Falcon
MemberCompsognathusDec-19-2014 5:37 PMWell, there are five I have planned. I've already revealed two, the Chasers and Prowlers... They don't come in until about Part 5 though... Anyway, I can say for sure that Part 3 is when we'll meet our first monster(s)...
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Sci-Fi King25
MemberAllosaurusDec-20-2014 12:06 PM@JPCerat, it's a Carcharodontosaurus. :)
“Banana oil.”- George Takei, Gigantis: The Fire Monster
JPCerato
MemberCompsognathusDec-20-2014 1:49 PMThanks Sci-Fi King! ;) That was my other guess.
BTW Guest what?! I getting JPOG on Christmas! My friend got it the other day... I would get it but I am in Queens Land Australia on holidays, I live down the coast back in Sydney...we always talk about it at school cant wait!!!!!