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A fight for life chapter 1

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Tyrant king

MemberCompsognathusAugust 10, 20141004 Views1 Replies

A small crack appeared on the last egg of the clutch. The parents eagerly waited. And the two siblings also watched as he came out. One peas a female named dawn because she hatched right at dawn. The male is named scar because his dad was way to rough with him and he had a scar on his head wear his crest is supposed tbefore in . His mothers name was flower cause she is unusually calm for her species. His dad was namerust eel jaw because he survived a kick to the face from a giganraptor.

He finally came out if the egg his name was tiny since he is the size of his dads tooth and much smaller then his siblings. His dad sniffed him then tried to gently play bite him but  flower stopper him and she put her head next do his and he licked the flesh of their teeth

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Lord Vader
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Nice start, looking forward to more from you. 

 

Some advice though, watch the spelling, grammar, and have paragraphs. It's easier to read when it isn't a big block of words. Also, watch punctuation. 

 

An example of the importance of punctuation: 

Let's eat, Grandma.

or

Let's eat Grandma. 

 

Which one one would you rather read in a story? Just an example of course. 

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