Hiphopananomus
MemberCompsognathusJul-11-2014 3:07 PMChapter 1
A small egg was steering, a creature was trying to get out,after about a minute the creature finally maneged to free himself from his prison. He started to stand up but, was pushed down. He looked up to see one of his siblings his, name was scolder. When the younger unamed giganotosarus tried to stand up scolder bit him on the, snout giving the giganotosarus his name Scarface.
Scarface had already earned his first scar, within 5 minutes of being alive. Scolder walked off after showing scarface whos boss, Scarface looked around he saw all of his brothers and sisters eating some sort of stegosaur. Suddenly the ground started to shake. Scarface looked around and saw, his mother coming. She was huge about 46 feet long from nose to tail, she weighed 8 tons and, was 17 feet tall.
She was carrying a small, baryonx Scarface and all his siblings waited at her feet. When she dropped the baryonx all of the baby Giganotosaurus went running. When Scarface got there scolder pushed out of the way. Scarface had to wait until scolder had his fill. Scarface examined his brother he noticed that he was a fair amount larger then he thought, his brother was about 5 feet long, 50 lbs and about 3 feet tall, Sacrface was only about half of his size.
Its been about 2 and a half years, since Scarface had been born. He'd grown a big deal, he was about 8 feet long, 600 lbs and 7 feet tall. Scolder was still bigger then him he was longer heavier and taller. Scarface admired and feared his older brother. After about anouther year Scarface and his other siblings were ready to learn, how to hunt. Each of the 3 females weighed about 850 lbs and the two males both had different sizes, Scar face was still smaller then scolder. Scarface watched as his mother hunted a small, galimimus.
He was amazed, how fast his mother was. After she had caught the gali, she got Scarface to try and catch anouther gali but, Scarface wasn't fast enough. Then scolder gave it a shot to Scarface's disbelief he caught the gali in his first try.
"Somewhere on this island is the greatest predator that ever lived. Second greatest predator must take him down."Roland Tembo"
"Jurassic park: The Lost World"
JRR
MemberCompsognathusJul-11-2014 3:41 PMgood story HPP, poor scarface, his brother is mean to him
Lord Vader
MemberTyrannosaurus RexJul-11-2014 3:43 PMNice start, looking forward to the next chapter.
One suggestion: Watch your grammar and punctuation.
Jack of all trades. Master of none
Hiphopananomus
MemberCompsognathusJul-11-2014 3:49 PMthatnks guys, MrHappy i'll try my best. catzilla yeah scolder isn't that big a fan of Scarface.
"Somewhere on this island is the greatest predator that ever lived. Second greatest predator must take him down."Roland Tembo"
"Jurassic park: The Lost World"
Dynamosaurus Imperiosus/ Raptorexxx 700
MemberCompsognathusJul-11-2014 6:15 PMAwesome Start I am really liking your posts hiphopananomus and my advice to you is be careful with grammar as much as you can as it is very important in any story, it's ok if english is not your native language (like me) just try the best you can. Hope i didn't offend or annoy you i was just giving you my advice
Regards
Hiphopananomus
MemberCompsognathusJul-11-2014 6:19 PMEnglish is my native launguage but I'm most likly a lot younger then most of you guys.
"Somewhere on this island is the greatest predator that ever lived. Second greatest predator must take him down."Roland Tembo"
"Jurassic park: The Lost World"
Dynamosaurus Imperiosus/ Raptorexxx 700
MemberCompsognathusJul-11-2014 6:38 PMI'm 12! Can you be younger than me.
Hiphopananomus
MemberCompsognathusJul-11-2014 6:39 PMI'm 12 also, I'll just try really hard!
"Somewhere on this island is the greatest predator that ever lived. Second greatest predator must take him down."Roland Tembo"
"Jurassic park: The Lost World"
Lord Vader
MemberTyrannosaurus RexJul-11-2014 6:56 PMOh, you're 12. That explains a lot actually. I was actually worse grammatically when I was 12 than you are. You're doing good, grammer and such will come, don't worry.
Jack of all trades. Master of none
Hiphopananomus
MemberCompsognathusJul-11-2014 7:10 PMThanks MrHappy. How old are you now?
"Somewhere on this island is the greatest predator that ever lived. Second greatest predator must take him down."Roland Tembo"
"Jurassic park: The Lost World"
Hiphopananomus
MemberCompsognathusJul-11-2014 9:42 PMOk, now it makes sense why your so much better at the writing then me.
"Somewhere on this island is the greatest predator that ever lived. Second greatest predator must take him down."Roland Tembo"
"Jurassic park: The Lost World"
Primal King
MemberCompsognathusJul-11-2014 11:13 PMI'm 15 too Mr. Happy. :) Virtual High-Five.
"If you can't see it... It's already too late."
-Jurassic Apocalypse (by Paden)
Allotitan
MemberCompsognathusJul-12-2014 9:03 AMI'm just a lonely 13 year old here. By the way great story I have a feeling that when scarface is all grown up he and scolder will fight for a mate or for a pack
When life gives you lemons, don't make lemonade. Tell life I don't want you're damn lemons, and then squeeze them into life's eyes!
UCMP 118742
MemberCompsognathusJul-13-2014 1:29 PMI'm also 13. Virtual High-Five. Nice start, I'm looking forward to the rest.
Keep in mind that many people have died for their beliefs; it's actually quite common. The real courage is in living and suffering for what you believe in. -Brom-