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Lost in time chapter #1

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Hiphopananomus

MemberCompsognathusJun-19-2014 6:58 AM

                                             Chapter 1 lost

 I woke up I felt a warm breeze I started to open my eyes but had to close them immediately because the sun was so bright! I moved a couple of feet away and then opened them to my surprise I was on a beach several questions came to my head "were am I?" "Why am I on a beach" "how did I get here" it felt like a some weird dream. I stood up and looked out into the horizon and thought were ever I am it sure is beautiful.

 

Then I heard a quite squeaking noise and I looked around and saw nothing then I felt a horrible pain in my legs I looked down and saw it. It looked like some weird lizard but it was standing on two legs? The second thought that popped into my mind was maybe its a dinosaur. I thought to myself this had to have just been a deformed lizard it kept biting my legs and I had enough so I kicked it sky high. I quickly realized that was a huge mistake when the ground started to shake then I heard a huge roar and turned around and saw a much bigger version of the little one it started at me for a minute and it looked something I saw in a dinosaur show.

 

The thoughts were racing through my head on what it could have been and then I noticed it had a horn on its head and that's when it came to me it was a ceratosarus. I started to think how heavy was this thing was it 1.5 or 2 tons? Before I could finish my thought it came charging after me I started to sprint as fast I could away I new I was pretty fast for a human but this thing was catching up fast I made a sharp turn into the woods thinking it would have a hard time getting through the trees but I was wrong I was still ahead of it a bit but it was getting really close. I ran into a clearing and saw so many dinosaurs they didn't seem to care about me until the cerato came into the clearing when that happened a huge one with a long neck roared at the cerato scaring it away. It all came to me at once somehow someway I've been transported a 150 million years in the past.

 

I new I had to do something it was getting dark fast and if it was night the carnivores were Going to be hunting the mere thought scared The life out of me. I started to serch for any kind of shelter after searching for about half an hour I found a small cave. I thought to myself that this is the best I'm going to get for tonight. I entered the cave it was only about 6 feet deep it wasn't very tall ether only about 7 feet or so. 

 

it was night now it was still fairly warm it was also very quite until a heard a massive roar. I went out to take a look and about 80 feet away I could see a ceratosarus being attacked by what looked like a allosarus. It was a quick painful death for the cerato it didnt stand a chance. Then I went back into the cave and went to sleep.

 

I only got to sleep for about 2 hours before being woken up by the stomps of the brachiosarus I went out and I realized how hungry and how thirsty I was. I want looking for food and water I surprisingly managed to find a lake I was about to start drinking but I stoped myself when I say a huge crocodile.

It it was coming towards me I ran off into the woods so it couldn't get me I then searched for anouther water source and found a small stream luckily it was to small for a crocdile. I started to drink it felt so good on my throat. But it made the hunger so much worse.

 

"Somewhere on this island is the greatest predator that ever lived. Second greatest predator must take him down."Roland Tembo"

"Jurassic park: The Lost World"

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Lord Vader

MemberTyrannosaurus RexJun-19-2014 10:00 AM

Nice start, just watch your spelling, grammar and punctuation, as well as where you capitalize anything. Nice start still, story is interesting.

Jack of all trades. Master of none

Hiphopananomus

MemberCompsognathusJun-19-2014 10:39 AM

Thanks for the advice

"Somewhere on this island is the greatest predator that ever lived. Second greatest predator must take him down."Roland Tembo"

"Jurassic park: The Lost World"

Lord Vader

MemberTyrannosaurus RexJun-19-2014 11:08 AM

You're welcome. The one that sticks out the most to me is your use of the word "New." Knew as in you know something has the letter "K" before the part you pronounce. Gotta love English. Rough, cough and through don't rhyme, but for some god forsaken reason, pony and bologna do.

Jack of all trades. Master of none

Sci-Fi King25

MemberAllosaurusJun-19-2014 12:53 PM

Mr.Happy already did the corrections, and here's my thoughts: it was an excellent concept and has a lot of potential. We all start somewhere with these.

“Banana oil.”- George Takei, Gigantis: The Fire Monster

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