Raptor-401
MemberAllosaurusMar-02-2014 5:43 PMThank you Acro Rex for proofreading this. This chapter will be rather short, ut do please enjoy!
CHAPTER 2
3 days had passed. It was night time, probably 2:30 AM. Nick sometimes checked for the Raptors in the middle of the night so it would be easier to find something. The kids snuck out to the kitchen to go have a snack. Thomas was awake and couldn’t fall sleep, he knew the kids were getting a snack. But he heard Nick coming into the Kitchen. Thomas got up fast, but he was too late.
Nick came in and saw the kids. “Ah hah! I knew that sick bastard was hiding something!” Said Nick.
The kids stared at Nick in horror as he pulled out his gun and aimed at Levy. Thomas came out of nowhere and Saw Nick. Thomas jumped on Nick, but Nick fired by accident, and the bullet hit Katy in the head.
Nick was always a very violent person on the inside. That’s why he checked for the kids every night, not because it was his job, he just wanted to kill something. Nick got his gun and shot Thomas also in the heart.
Katy was already dead. Tom, furious at what just happened, transformed into a raptor and bit Nick’s neck. The gun fell off his hand. Levy grabbed the gun and shot Nick in the head.
Thomas was lying on the floor.
“I wished for Death to take me, and now, I got what I asked for. Heh, why must life be unfair for me. Now who’s going to take care of the kids? So much happens to me in my life, often within less than a minute. One minute I find out my family is dead. One minute I lose 4 raptors and Levine. Now this minute I lose one of my children and finally… myself.” Thought Thomas to himself.
Tom transformed back into a human.
Thomas called them.
“Listen carefully you two. I am going to die in minutes. Those gunshots were loud. People are going to come any minute now. Leave me and Katy here. Go into my room and open my drawer on the desk with a lamp. In it you will find keys which lead to the graveyard, figure out a way to get out of this place through there. That will be the only safe place to get out of here. I haven’t been out there in the real world for years, I am sorry, but you guys from here on and out will have to figure everything out yourselves.” Said Thomas, coughing blood. He was ready to die in a matter of minutes.
“Well maybe you’re going to a better place now… right?” asked Tom, in tears.
“You guys don’t know much about me, in reality. My old diary is in the same drawer with the keys. Take it and read it. Then you will… truly know about me. But for now, go! And RUN!” Said Thomas.
Tom and Levy were in tears and started running. They were having trouble figuring out what had just happened, after all. Tom had lost the love of his life while Levy had lost Thomas, who he always loved so much. He was going to miss his jokes.
Chapter 3 should be posted sometime this week. I am trying to finish this story quite quickly, the only purpose of this story is to prepare you for the 3rd and final installment. So, what you should REALLY be exicted for is the next story to come.
PLEASE LEAVE A COMMENT! And yeah, the purpose of this chapter was just to show how quickly things can go wrong...
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Lord Vader
MemberTyrannosaurus RexMar-02-2014 5:50 PMGood chapter as usual.
You.... uhhhh..... sure don't have any problems with....... well.... killing the ..... female...... characters.
Jack of all trades. Master of none
Raptor-401
MemberAllosaurusMar-02-2014 5:51 PMYah, i had some trouble, but I am NOT SEXIST.
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Raptor-401
MemberAllosaurusMar-02-2014 5:52 PMAnd it was NICK who killed her by ACCIDENT. Levy was going to die.
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Lord Vader
MemberTyrannosaurus RexMar-02-2014 5:55 PMI know. Just the same, accident or not, you wrote it to have her die. Just saying, it's an interesting story still.
Looking forward to the next chapter though.
Jack of all trades. Master of none
Raptor-401
MemberAllosaurusMar-02-2014 5:57 PMWell, the story is going to be focusing on Tom and his emtional/physical troubles. And I am not trying to sound bad or anything, but killing males isn't less worse or something...
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Raptor-401
MemberAllosaurusMar-02-2014 7:07 PMSorry if I offended anyone, though...
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x_paden_x
MemberCompsognathusMar-02-2014 9:40 PMHeh, I kinda have to side with Mr.Happy, You certainly didn't have much a problem with killing of the female characters in your stories...
Not... Sure... why?
I mean uh, star burst or whatever her name was, 401's sister, She practiacally just flat out died... (She was kinda a b*tch but That could've turned anyway...) I know katy had her own thoughts about death but... Flip Flops, she could've gone any way...
I don't think its sexist, Im just curious because you only add in a single female character and then have them die...
"Curiouser and curiouser indeed..." - The Kamino Genetics officer to Obi-Wan Kenobi on their inspection of the clones.
Life cannot be contained, it breaks walls, crashes through barriers sometimes painfully, but uh... Life uh, finds a way
Raptor-401
MemberAllosaurusMar-02-2014 9:49 PMWell when you read the 3rd installment, evreyhting I did will make sense. And I was going to make Stardust a love interest but something changed my mind. And can you guys stop!? I know it's weird, but I never actually realised that, so yeah...
IT'S TIME TO DU-DU-DU-DU-DUEL!!!
x_paden_x
MemberCompsognathusMar-02-2014 10:52 PMHey, Tis just creative critisism.
Remember that its your story, Forge it the way you wish, as it may be your tool.
I can see why stardust wouldn't be a love interest, No one like a rude person.
I'm just saying aswell, You kill off characters before we get to see character development, All we really knew of stardust was that she was a jerk, and no one liked her. Just develope them a bit more before you kill 'em off.
Life cannot be contained, it breaks walls, crashes through barriers sometimes painfully, but uh... Life uh, finds a way
Raptor-401
MemberAllosaurusMar-02-2014 11:04 PMWell Thomas has had a lot of character development, I killed off Katy for Tom's character development.
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UCMP 118742
MemberCompsognathusMar-03-2014 6:47 AMI did notice how your stories are a lot more depressing because everybody just dies. Still very interesting and enjoyable. I don't think that 'enjoyable' is the right word here, of course i don't enjoy people dying. I'm just gonna stop talking now.
Keep in mind that many people have died for their beliefs; it's actually quite common. The real courage is in living and suffering for what you believe in. -Brom-
Primal King
MemberCompsognathusMar-03-2014 4:29 PMI believe the word your looking for is "entertaining" UCMP. As for the female thing, there should be a few more, and not every single one should die. If your going to kill a female, there needs to be a replacement. Girls can add a component to stories at times. But I agree its not sexist, just my opinion... Great chapter though!
"If you can't see it... It's already too late."
-Jurassic Apocalypse (by Paden)
Raptor-401
MemberAllosaurusMar-03-2014 4:59 PMThere will be more girsl when Tom and Levy escape.
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Raptor-401
MemberAllosaurusMar-03-2014 5:04 PM*girls/ Also Levy will be the main protaginist in this story while Tom will be the proganist in the 3rd installment. I am trying to focus more on Tom, as you will see when the next chapter is posted.
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