Raptor-401
MemberAllosaurusFeb-13-2014 6:04 PMA special thanks to usr Primal King for giving me a name to name this story. This segment will be rather short. Please note this is my first dinosaur story, so please exucse me if the story sounds off, has weird plot and elements, or too far-fecthed. Please comment after reading so that I know if this was actually good or not. I am trying to make this story unique than others. Other than that, please enjoy.
(This segment will be treated as if it were past tense.)
The year was 2223, and when it came to cloning and genetically engineering, anything was now possible. World War 3 had been going on, and all the countries were fighting with machines and huge guns. America had come up with an idea, why not create something big, huge, strong, smart, and EXTREMELY powerful? A set of Scientists decided to clone a dinosaur, since almost everything was possible now, it would be easy to clone a dinosaur... but they realized there would probably be HUNDREDS of failures. They decide to get the biggest and strongest dinosaurs, and clone them. They would also genetically engineer them. They would have to leave it to the “company”.
The “company” was top secret, so secret it was even given a name, but strangely no last name. When someone came to become a worker, they had to agree that they would “die” and no longer exist on record. Your name would also change once you were employed. Most of the people who agreed to this were orphans or people who didn’t care for their own families. Society was very corrupt now. Now that World War 3 had started, America and the other countries were in a rush to be the strongest out there.
25-year-old Thomas, now employed for 3 years along with his 23-year-old friend, Levine, were picked with coming up with a possible solution for America to be the leading country in the war. You see, the “company” majored in genetically engineering and cloning. They would create top secret advanced super humans, stuff the public would never find out. Of course, every here and then someone would find something out, but then some tragic and “accidental” event would happen to them…
Well, Thomas and Levine came up with something cool and creative. Why create giant killer monsters when they already existed and there remains are left behind? Dinosaurs. Many of them were strong, and some were even proven to have actually been smart. They would also add some features to them, and maybe make them stronger and better. The idea was quickly approved…
…but…
Little did they realize it would be difficult to get the final product. 3 years passed, and the war seemed to be getting more and more threatening. How many times had they failed, exactly? 400 times. It was hard to do, because they put onto the computer that they wanted this thing to be 40% raptor, 25% Spinosaurus, 10% human, 15% Anklyosaurus, and the other 10% to be new and genetically engineered attributes. They wanted the club on the back of the tail to have electrical attribute, the arms to be like raptors but human at the same time. 400 times had they failed, they never got what they wanted, because the super dinosaurs didn’t have the genetically engineered superpowers. Since the dinosaurs were mostly composed of “raptors”, they just called the failed products “Raptor #XXX.” Some were missing body parts, some couldn’t handle the bacteria in this new world, the oxygen levels, and they would generally be vulnerable in the battlefield. The company providing them money to create the money were now extremely mad and had lost their impatience after so many failures…
Little did they know that the number “401” would be their brand new luck number…
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Raptor-401
MemberAllosaurusFeb-13-2014 6:19 PMPlease comment on your thoughts and "subscribe" for more updates and chapters!
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Primal King
MemberCompsognathusFeb-13-2014 6:34 PMLooks good so far!
"If you can't see it... It's already too late."
-Jurassic Apocalypse (by Paden)
Gojira2K
MemberCompsognathusFeb-13-2014 7:13 PMI like it so far, it has an interesting storyline to it. What do you think if I start my own Dinosaur story.
"There is nothing noble in being superior to your fellow man; true nobility is being superior to your former self." - Ernest Hemingway.
Raptor-401
MemberAllosaurusFeb-13-2014 7:17 PMGo ahead, do what i did and try to make 100% riginal and unique from the others. Be special with your story.
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Gojira2K
MemberCompsognathusFeb-13-2014 7:36 PMThanks. Still your story sounds good so far.
"There is nothing noble in being superior to your fellow man; true nobility is being superior to your former self." - Ernest Hemingway.
Raptor-401
MemberAllosaurusFeb-13-2014 7:42 PMThank you for your positive opinion. If you want, i can help you brainstorm ideas via mail through Scified. Message me if you want help.
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Primal King
MemberCompsognathusFeb-13-2014 8:02 PMI would just make sure to iclude realistic effects!
"If you can't see it... It's already too late."
-Jurassic Apocalypse (by Paden)
Raptor-401
MemberAllosaurusFeb-13-2014 8:02 PMIn my story or Gojira's?
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Primal King
MemberCompsognathusFeb-13-2014 8:09 PMYours. But Gojiras too. :)
"If you can't see it... It's already too late."
-Jurassic Apocalypse (by Paden)
Raptor-401
MemberAllosaurusFeb-13-2014 8:11 PMI will. Right now I am almost done with Chapter 1 and describing the other characters in detail.
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Svanya
AdminAllosaurusFeb-13-2014 9:31 PMGreat story Raptor 401! I liked it! Love the name Levine, it's like Ken Levine from BioShock!! :)
Raptor-401
MemberAllosaurusFeb-13-2014 9:33 PMThank you very much! Chapter 1 will most likely be posted tomorrow! I named the guy levine because in the book version of the Lost World, there is a character named Richard Levine.
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Primal King
MemberCompsognathusFeb-13-2014 10:36 PMI caught onto that. :)
"If you can't see it... It's already too late."
-Jurassic Apocalypse (by Paden)
Raptor-401
MemberAllosaurusFeb-13-2014 10:39 PMYah, it was a dissapointment when I found out that they removed him from the movie...
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x_paden_x
MemberCompsognathusFeb-13-2014 10:55 PMWell, they never removed him from the movie, just mushed him into another character... They did the same with Regis in the first one.
Life cannot be contained, it breaks walls, crashes through barriers sometimes painfully, but uh... Life uh, finds a way
Raptor-401
MemberAllosaurusFeb-13-2014 11:10 PMYah, forgot about that. It's kind of weird that they mashed up Kelly and Arby in the movie...
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Primal King
MemberCompsognathusFeb-14-2014 12:02 AMI was bummed when no one got crippled by a T. Rex and then got their face eaten of by its babies In the 2nd one. :) and you guys are right, they mushed Levine and ludlow into 1, same with Regis and gennaro, and Arby and Kelly. Interesting... ;)
"If you can't see it... It's already too late."
-Jurassic Apocalypse (by Paden)
Primal King
MemberCompsognathusFeb-14-2014 12:05 AMAnd thanks for giving me props once again. :)
"If you can't see it... It's already too late."
-Jurassic Apocalypse (by Paden)
Gojira2K
MemberCompsognathusFeb-14-2014 10:34 AMYeah we could brainstorm ideas, because I really have no idea what. Y story would be about.
"There is nothing noble in being superior to your fellow man; true nobility is being superior to your former self." - Ernest Hemingway.
TheDinosaurMan
MemberCompsognathusFeb-14-2014 9:28 PMThis is probably one of the most unique and interesting stories I've read in a while. I can't wait to see where this goes, fantastic job!
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MemberAllosaurusFeb-14-2014 9:38 PMThank you so much! Unique is what I seek!
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Raptor-401
MemberAllosaurusFeb-14-2014 9:40 PMChapter 1 and 2 are almost done writng, however I am waiting for User Primal King to finish proofreading! Please follow to make sure you don't miss out!
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